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Modern technology such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. what are some of the merits and demerits of this situation.

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Innovation in technology like laptops and unrestricted access to
web
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the web
 has brought in feasibility for a
lots
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lot
 of employees to function from their convenient places rather than/
inspite
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in spite
 of
comminuting
the travel of a commuter
commuting
committing
 to offices which eats up some part of their time. Productivity and better
work
 life balance will be increased by providing
work
 from home policy / facilities
,
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,
but there are
also
 few
downside
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downsides
 attached to it. On the one hand, there are
number
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a number
 of positive aspects associated with personnel working from home.
Firstly
, due to fewer interruptions, allowing more focused
work
 which leads to elevates the efficiency. Members of the workforce can be put
on to
to on
onto
 the project despite different
timezones
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time zones
, as they can independently choose their workplace.
Secondly
, it is advantageous because it improves
work
-life fit.
For instance
,
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,
 as per the survey conducted by SurveyMonkey, it is proven that 80% of workers are more motivated and enthusiast by allowing them to
work
 at their own places.
Thirdly
,
this
 policy provides financial benefits to employers as staff can be located near to the clients place rather than in office premises.
On the other hand
,
inspite
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in spite
 of the merits, it becomes difficult for the leads
to measure
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measure
 the home
workers
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workers'
worker's
worker
 performance. The development of staff and
skills
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skill
upgradation
 would be a problem to deal with. Another issue is security of information will be at risks which is more likely to occur due to lack of visibility and communication gap. The discussion which could have done in
few minutes
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a few minutes
 in person, with hires situated at distinct places might have to wait for hours to get a reply. It
shoot
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shoots
 up the telecommunication cost of business. In Conclusion, while employees can have many advantages from remote
working but
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working, but
 it
also
 becomes difficult to rank hires
,
Accept space
,
 reduces verbal interaction and cases can be registered for sensitive data
breeching
act in disregard of laws, rules, contracts, or promises
breaching
. These demerits can put the organization into miserable conditions.

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