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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities have to make it easier, especially for such groups, to get into them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Universities have to make it easier, especially for the students from poor families or students live in rural areas and
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 groups find it difficult to get a
university
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education
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. I completely agree with the idea because get a
university
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education
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 is every
student
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’s dream. It’s not a secret that
government universities
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government, universities
 have the toughest
selection
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 mechanism. Not only a
student
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have
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has
 to pass
advanced level examination
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an advanced level examination
the advanced level examination
 from school, but
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 he
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has
 to get
certain level
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a certain level
 of grades and a
university
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selection
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 score called “Z Score”. Even though you get good grades your
university
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selection
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 will depend on your “Z Score”. As an example, if you have
certain score level
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a certain score level
certain score levels
the certain score level
 that illegible for
university
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 application that doesn’t mean you can get admission from your nearest government
university
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. Specially for students from poor family background or from rural areas find
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 very difficult because they have to leave their home town and move to a different location until your
university
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education
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 complete. Another issue that discourage students from
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 groups is
university
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 accommodation is not sufficient to
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fully
 fill all the students and often they have to find nearby boarding houses or flats and that makes
student
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expense
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expenses
 rise up. Even though you get free
education
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 from the universities scenarios like
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 will increase the weight of the
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 families. I believe universities have to make certain changes to the
student
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selection
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 process while improving their accommodation capacity. Lowering the
selection
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 score and allow students to get admission from nearby universities make big relief
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to
for
 students from
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 groups. As a
student
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myself I
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myself, I
 agree that
university
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education
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 should available not only for students from middle or high-class family
backgrounds but
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backgrounds, but
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 from poor and rural areas so that every person can benefit from
university
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education
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 equally.
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