It is generally believed some people are born with certain talents, for instant for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There is an argument that children can be learned and performed as like talented people. Even though, people are born with talent do better than taught person, from my vantage point, I highly believe that humans can be trained. On the one hand, many people say that some talents like sport or music is gifted to some special people since they were born, so most ordinary people cannot be like them.
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with, Thomas Edison said "the genius is made by 99percents of effort and 1percent
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to
inspire" but normal people cannot have that 'the 1percent' usually.
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, people who have the special gift, they only need shorter training than usual man.
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, talented people train same time with ordinary people, they are faster
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, we can see
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in the story of Mozart and Salieri.
On the other hand
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, some believe that ordinary people can be trained and do as special people.
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, most number of people in the world are not born with talent but they made good result as gifted people, sometimes better than them.
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, a Korean star football
player
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named 'Ji-sung Park' was not
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a very good player
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when he was young,
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, now he is the most valuable
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in the history of Korea with his efforts and hard training.
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, if only born talented people can be a star, which bring
tryless
the act of testing something
trials
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world, because nobody want to try anything,
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, everyone
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does not need
to be a superstar, if everyone is
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a superstar
, there is no superstar at all. In conclusion,
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talented people to be a high level
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easily, in my point of view, I convinced that anyone can be good with training.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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