It is generally believed some people are born with certain talents, for instant for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There is an argument that children can be learned and performed as like talented people. Even though, people are born with talent do better than taught person, from my vantage point, I highly believe that humans can be trained. On the one hand, many people say that some talents like sport or music is gifted to some special people since they were born, so most ordinary people cannot be like them.

To begin

with, Thomas Edison said "the genius is made by 99percents of effort and 1percent

Suggestion

inspire" but normal people cannot have that 'the 1percent' usually.

In addition

, people who have the special gift, they only need shorter training than usual man.

As a result

, talented people train same time with ordinary people, they are faster

then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

others.

For example

, we can see

this

in the story of Mozart and Salieri.

On the other hand

, some believe that ordinary people can be trained and do as special people.

Firstly

, most number of people in the world are not born with talent but they made good result as gifted people, sometimes better than them.

For example

, a Korean star football

player

named 'Ji-sung Park' was not

very good

Suggestion

a very good player

player

when he was young,

however

, now he is the most valuable

player

in the history of Korea with his efforts and hard training.

Secondly

, if only born talented people can be a star, which bring

tryless

the act of testing something

trials

treeless

world, because nobody want to try anything,

Lastly

, everyone

do not need

Suggestion

does not need

to be a superstar, if everyone is

superstar

Suggestion

a superstar

, there is no superstar at all. In conclusion,

although

talented people to be a high level

player

easily, in my point of view, I convinced that anyone can be good with training.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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12Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

288 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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