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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some would believe that college students should study any subject they want, while others would say that the pupils should only choose the practical subjects
such
 as science and
technology
 that have scope in the future. While practical subjects help a country to develop i
n
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at
a rapid pace, I think students should be allowed to study any stream they want in order to allow them to be successful and happy. On the one hand, the fields
such
 as science,
technology
, engineering and mathematics have practical applications
that i
s
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are
necessary to develop a nation rapidly, so students should only choose these subjects i
n
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at
university.
This
 means these subjects develop skills in students that are required to plan, design and manufacture many necessary infrastructures and products which are the b
ack-bone
a central cohesive source of support and stability
backbone
backbones
for a nation’s progress.
For example
, a similar initiative in China resulted in a huge progress in the field of
technology
 since 1989, as 80% of the world’s b
ig
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biggest
companies, nowadays, manufacture their goods there.
However
,
this
 pressurises many pupils to choose these subjects despite their interests on the other fields.
On the other hand
, enabling students to select the subject of their interest f
or
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in
higher education makes them successful and happy in their lives.
This
 is to say that there are lots of fields from where the students can choose according to their interest, so one can only work with full concentration and achieve good results when he studies or stays on the track of his own choice.
For instance
, a study conducted by the BBC News revealed that professionals in Nepal who studied the fields of their choice were found 65% happier and 70% more successful than those who did not have the options to choose from.
Therefore
, the selection of the subjects f
or
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in
higher education should be the entire decision of a student. In conclusion,
although
 subjects that are useful in the future applications
such
 as science and
technology
 help a nation to grow faster, I think students should be allowed to select their own subject for university so that they could be happy and successful in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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