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Some people believe that the radio is more enjoyable and practical than TV. Do you agree?

#people #radio #tv
People are divided on the opinion about the best form of entertainment. While it is often thought that the
radio
 provides more enjoyment, I strongly believe that watching the television is more enjoyable. There are a variety of reasons why people believe that
radio
 transmissions are more effective in terms of passing time in a better way.
First
,
conveneince
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
 in listening
radio
 is one of the reasons for the popularity of
this
 medium.
For example
, people can do other tasks while listening to it
such
 as cooking and driving.
Secondly
, only listening to different voices definitely enhance imaginary skills of listeners. A person not only
listen but
Accept comma addition
listen, but
also
 focus on the content of the program and imagine it in the mind.
Last
 but not least, it is a cheap form of entertainment which a person can listen without paying subscription charges.
On the other hand
, some people argue that watching tv is more practical and
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 and I agree.
To begin
,
this
 medium provides audio and visuals at the same time, which enhances the experience of viewers. Another great benefit is that language is not a barrier in case of watching television.
For instance
, a person can enjoy foreign content just by reading subtitles of any language
whic
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
 he can understand.
Finally
, it is not only playing a crucial role to generate awareness about different cultures, but
also
 bringing
sveral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
 nationalities closer to each other.
For example
, a great deal of population
fromm
a giver or sender
from
 all over the world watch Hollywood movies and try to understand their culture. In conclusion, it seems to me that
radio
 has some benefits;
however
, positive aspects of using tv as a hobby to consume leisure time is much more than just listening to
radio
 transmissions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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