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Television dominates the free time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.

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 is a major source of entertainment for people these days and its craze has been increasing with the innumerable channels and programs available. Watching
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 does not involve any physical exercise and gives rise to laziness which might
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 lead to health problems.
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people have a lot of stress in their lives due to busy work schedules and are unable to make the time to go out for any kind of entertainment. As
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 is the cheapest and the most easily available
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 of recreation, people resort to watching
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 more than anything. ‘Couch potato’ is a term which has been coined for those who watch
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 excessively. Most people sit at home with family or friends and watch programmes all day long. Due to
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, people tend to get lazy, obese and prefer to stay at home and spend most of their time watching
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 rather than utilizing it by doing something productive.
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,
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 means being indoors most of the time and no social activity is involved.
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 leads to people turning into introverts and losing social skills. People who only watch
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 start avoiding social situations which involves talking to people and being in their company.
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 become a problem which might result in diseases like insomnia and schizoid. It can be concluded that watching too much
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 can have many negative consequences like becoming lazy, putting on weight and lack of social skills. But if it is watched in a limited and constrained manner all these negative effects can be avoided.

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