Some people think developing countries should invite large foreign companies to open offices and factories to grow their economies. other think developing Countries should keep the large companies out and develop local companies instead. Discuss both views

#people #countries #companies #offices #factories #economies

welcoming

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Welcoming

new ideas And

trade

via developed Countries is a healthy way to exchange Culture and innovation of some new ideas. Inviting foreign Companies to expand their

buisness

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

business

has always been debatable and now it has become more controversial.

whereas

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Whereas

Critics

thinks

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think

that local Companies should

given

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give

priority to

prosperous thier

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their prosperous

prosperous their

buisness

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

business

and company. In

this

essay we will have

discussion

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a discussion

regarding both sides of

fence

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the fence

. Critics agree that giving foreign Companies

previlage

a special advantage or immunity or benefit not enjoyed by all

privilege

privileges

privileged

to set up their

trade

And factories will boost their economies to rest at

back door

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the back door

. In

this

way all the less known local factories will not only be dominated by developed foreign Companies but

also

will be easily taken over with time.

Moreover there

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Moreover, there

will be

lack

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a lack

of growth and infrastructure will fall

down thereby

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down, thereby

Collapsing all the coal

buisness

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

business

. To illustrate domestic cloth Companies nowadays have been Completely

over taken

catch up with and possibly overtake

overtaken

by foreign brands.

youngsters

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Youngsters

are Completely Swayed by branded Clothes leading demolishing of local cloth Companies,

hence

fall down of economy.

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the other hand, many minded people faster

this

thinking and even I am in Stand with

this

that all the developing nations should acknowledge the foreign Companies to Commence new offices and factories.

This

practice will not only benefit

developed

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developers

developer

Countries to grow their

economy but

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economy, but

will

also

boost the

trade

and Competition among developing Countries as well.

As a

result to

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result, to

Compete with them local Companies will have to work

more hard

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harder

and bring up with ample amount of new ideas And technique for

sake

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the sake

of their survival

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into

market.

furthermore

in addition

Furthermore

, intermixing of local and foreign Companies and factories will Allow us to share more rich foreign Culture and tradition.

This

will

inturn

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in turn

bind society into one bead and feeling of brotherhood will strengthen the bond between two. In conclusion, to harmonise the above debate it is necessary government should Come into action and take necessary action. It should only allow some factories or

trade

setup

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set up

its base

instead

of welcoming each And every bind of

company

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the company

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should only

incest

make an investment

invest

insist

those Company whom we think will benefit

The objective case of we, the persons speaking

near future

Suggestion

the near future

. In

this

way it will not only promote

trade

but will

also

stop Unnecessary hoppers to establish their roots in developing Countries.

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