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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree.

#accessibility #university
College Education in general is one of the necessity learning worldwide. Some people believed that both students from well off and less privileged experience difficulties getting into university.I strongly disagree
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because in my
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opinion, I
 think that rich families have greater access to tertiary education without any hindrances compared to the poor. Children coming from rich families have a lot of special privileges that makes tertiary education an easy access
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to
 them.They have vast resources that can comply the needed requirements of any university they plan to pursue.One good example of
this
 is the Harvard University in the United States.Statistic shows that 80 percent of those studying there come from well known families around the globe.
Therefore
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students studying there
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belong
 to the elites worldwide.
On the other hand
, less privileged students belonging from the poor section of society have a hard time in going to University.Limited resources due to financial incapability
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serve
 as a hindrance in procuring requirements that are needed for them to study in any university that they want.Most of the time
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their finances can only support their daily needs. To conclude
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the rich people have a higher chance of going to any tertiary school with a slim percentage of difficulties compared to
poor people
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the poor people
 who might encounter several hindrances mainly due to the lack of monetary resources that would be
neede
necessary for relief or supply
needed
need
 to fund their education.

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