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differences in wheat exports over three different areas

#differences #wheat #exports #three #areas
The above line graph explains fluctuations
of
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wheat
exports
 in three different countries
canada
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,
austraila
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Australia
 and
europe
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 from 1985 to 1990. At first in 1985 the
wheat
exports
 in all the 3 countries were
in
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between 15 to 20 but we can see that the
european
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country
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wheat
export
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was
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fell under 15 in 1986 and the same country was able to come up to 15 and maintain the same for the
upcoming
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 2 years.
however
, we can see a change in
other
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 two countries where
australia
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was
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slightly decreased to 10 from 16 and a dramatic change in
canada
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exports
 from 16 to 25 in 1988. European community
wheat
exports
 were raised
about
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 4 from 15
while
the
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canada
 decreased from 25 to 14 and
australia
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 continued to lower its rate till 1990. In the
end
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europe
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takes
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 the lead standing above 20 by crossing
the
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canada
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 in 1990 and
austraila
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Australia
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 the same at 11 from 1989.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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