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Some people think that watching sport is wastage of time during leisure time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, watching
sport
 is gaining popularity day by day. Some people consider it as a
time
 waste while others do not. I express my
disgreement
a conflict of people's opinions or actions or characters
disagreement
 for the aforementioned statement due to 2 main advantages of utilising your leisure
time
. Watching
sport
 not only improves your
team
 skill, but
also
 help you in becoming a better person by teaching you discipline and improving your decision making skills.
This
 essay will discuss the pros of watching sports in free
time
.
Firstly
,
team
sport
 can provide you a learning on how to work with other
team
 members and to unite everyone
inorder
Suggestion
in order
 to achieve a single goal.
Additionally
,
team
 collaboration
also
 helps in understanding other people's mentality, their working style and culture.
Secondly
,
sport
 helps you in becoming you a better person by teaching some life changing lessons like discipline and decision making ability. Sports is a very good example where
situation
Suggestion
the situation
 changes very rapidly and a quick decision is required to handle it. In the worst situation, it teaches us to consistently putting effort and continue to hope till the
last
. All in all,
sport
 is a complete mixture of many qualities which can change a person's life and to understand all these lessons fully, I strongly believe that watching and analysing a game is more important rather than spending leisure
time
 somewhere else.
However
, a
pratical
concerned with actual use or practice
practical
protocol
 implementation is equally important, so I strongly support to spend some
time
 in playing sports
also
.

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