IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local costum and behavior others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural difference Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #visitors #countries #costum #behavior #host #country #difference
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There are those who believe that tourist should adhere to the culture of the country visited while the alternate stance is that the visited state should accept cultural diversity.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the contentious argument and I will give my own perspective to be that welcoming region should tolerate the diversity in people's way of life. The tradition of a host state should be practiced by incomers as
this
 will lead to a peaceful stay without harassment. Foreigners who maintain the practices of host nations are viewed as people who have regards for the native tradition,
thus
 improves their relationship with the dwellers.
Also
, these tourists will not be viewed as people with deviant behaviour.
Therefore
, they will not be maltreated. Abiding to the nation's culture will make their stay enjoyable and can be aided by the inhabitants since they will be regarded as responsible individuals.
For instance
, studies show that 70% of immigrants who act
accordingly
 to the expectations of the visited country always enjoy a trouble free stay.
This
 portrays the saying that when you are in Rome you act like the Romans. Recipient economy should accommodate differences in the incomers way of life. As
this
 will make them maintain a reputable name. Countries that are perceived as welcoming and non hostile are seen as ideal. Reason being that they acknowledge the individual's own pattern and does not expect them to relegate their culture in the host tradition.
This
 singular act increases the number of immigrants in
such
 regions. Thereby, causing a rise in the number of their workforce and in returns, improves their productivity.
For instance
, The United Kingdom is viewed as the most accommodating countries since it does not have rigid rules that deprives its visitors the opportunity to practice the believe that they have been used to.
This
 has lead to the influx of a lot of immigrants to their society increasing their production rate. In conclusion, I believe both view has its merit.
However
, on balance I believe that it is essential that native land allow foreigners to practice their known lifestyle.
This
 will enhance patronage and increase number of visitors to
such
 nations. It is recommended that people should be allowed to live freely where ever they are than to be restricted with the introduction of the new way of life.
Submitted by ezekielimoesiri on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: