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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

#missions #space #earth #demand #attention
In the era of 21st century, Human has been reached to
Moon
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the Moon
,
Jupitar
the largest planet and the 5th from the sun; has many satellites and is one of the brightest objects in the night sky
Jupiter
 and
Murcary
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Mercury
. The
jurney
the act of traveling from one place to another
journey
 to reach there was not easy and every once cup
to
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of
 tea. Scientists are
continuoulsy
at every point
continuously
continually
 working on exploring the space as much as they can.
there
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There
 are many signs found by
reseacher
a scientist who devotes himself to doing research
researchers
researcher
 which pretend the possibility of life except earth. According to my
opinion there
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opinion, there
 is no harm to discover the life beyond the planet we are living. Many
countrries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
trying
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are trying
 to reach
first
 there
beacuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
 the natural resources of
Earth we
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Earth, we
 are consuming and almost consumed and if these
resouces
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
 diminished
then
 how human will survive?
For instance
, The US Scientific research organization NASA has identified the clues to live on
Moon
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the Moon
.
On the other hand
 it
can not
can not
cannot
 be
deny
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denied
 that to explore other planets is too much expensive and time consuming. To exemplify
,
Accept space
,
 India recently launched its Chandrayan 2
mission which
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missions, which
missions which
 failed at its
last
 stage.
the
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The
 total estimated cost was about 100 crore of rupees. Developing
Conutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 like
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
,
this
 is a huge amount to spend.

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