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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Most people would agree that
car
 ownership has increased in recent years and is causing a range of problems, particularly in built-up areas. I think there are a number of ways that governments can aim to deal with
this
. Many big cities in the world have traffic
problems but
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problems, but
 these problems vary.
For example
, it is reasonably easy to drive around my city after 10 am and before 5 pm.
However
, outside these hours, you have to allow double the usual time to reach your destination. In some other cities, traffic is congested at all times, and there is the continual sound of
car
 horns as people try to get wherever they want to go. One of the best approaches governments can take in busy cities is to encourage the use of public transport.
This
 means the transport facilities have to be well run and people must be able to afford them. Buses, trams and trains are good ways of getting around, and if they are cheap and reliable, people will use them. Another approach is to discourage people from actually entering the city by building
car
 parks and shopping centres on the outskirts. Many cities around the world do
this
 quite successfully and offer
passengers
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passenger
 bus transport into the centre, if they need it. At peak travel periods, governments can
also
 run campaigns to encourage people to be less dependent on their cars. Apparently, a lot of
car
 trips involve very short journeys to, say, the supermarket or local school. These are often unnecessary, but we automatically get in our cars without thinking. Clearly we all have a responsibility to look after our cities. Governments can do a lot to improve the situation and part of what they do should involve encouraging individuals to consider alternatives to driving.

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