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some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea while others disagree strongly with. Consider both sides of this debates and present your own idea. You should give reasons for your answer and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience

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There have been arguments on whether or not it is beneficial for secondary
school
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 leavers to spend a
year
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 at home before proceeding to higher institution. While some individuals perceive it is a productive idea to give students time to build other
passion
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 they have
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it is totally opposed by others thinking it will have
negative impact
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a negative impact
 on their grades especially in
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first
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the first year
year
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 in the
university
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one hand
,
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,
staying back for about 12 months after high
school
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 gives opportunity to students.
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 is because they can have
this
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 period to build other
passion
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 and abilities they have which is able to make them stand out among their peers during
university
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 education.
For example
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, I discovered I have
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passion
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a passion
 for fabric design which I was able to achieve by enrolling in fashion
school
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 after secondary education.
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 opened doors of opportunities for me and served as
extra source
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an extra source
 of income.
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,
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,
this
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 idea believed by certain persons to be have
positive effect
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a positive effect
 on children.
On the other hand
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,
this
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 act is said to have
notable negative impact
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a notable negative impact
 on students' output in
year
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 one. The reason being that there is risk of shifting their focus from education and
also
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 reducing their mental capacity while waiting. To illustrate, a research conducted by some lecturers on
success rate
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the success rate
 of student after
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first session
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the first session
 in
university
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 found out that most of the students with low grades were those who didn't enter
university
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 immediately after high
school
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.
Therefore
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,
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,
some people feel
this
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 act gives students
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
. In conclusion, I believe that both sides have their merits.
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, on balance, I tend to believe that it is more beneficial for children to spend about a
year
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 after secondary
school
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 building other
passion
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 they have to make them outstanding.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • life experience
  • independent
  • practical skills
  • reflect
  • educational and career goals
  • academic environment
  • adjust to
  • disinterested
  • counterproductive
  • internships
  • volunteering
  • enrich
  • perspective
  • resume
  • economic considerations
  • financial constraints
  • privilege
  • personal growth
  • acquiring new skills
  • sense of direction
  • immensely beneficial
  • well-planned
  • aligned
  • future goals
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