You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter explain why you want to reduce your working hours say which hours you would like to work describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

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Dear Mr. Morshedzadeh I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing to ask you about my working hours and I would appreciate it if you could accept my request. As you know I have worked as a technical inspector in the industrial department since 2012 and these years I do not register for any technical courses. I across an advertisement on the internet about a
course
called Advanced Inspection of Electrical Equipment, and I am pretty keen on registering my name in it. So I need your confirmation of my request to reduce my working time.
In addition
, I prefer my working hours in the morning on Mondays and Thursdays
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to me for engagement in the
course
.
Lastly
, I would to tell
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you
at the end
of the
course
I will
giveyou
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give you
acertificate
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a certificate
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and it is so beneficial for our department.
In addition
, I would to say that the during of the
course
is three months. Thanks for your attention
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faithfully Masoud Mehranfar
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Consider breaking down your paragraphs to separate different ideas clearly. For example, separate the reasons for reducing hours from your preferred schedule and benefits to the employer.
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Pay attention to minor grammatical errors such as typos and article usage to enhance clarity (e.g., 'during' should be 'duration').
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The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, suitable for a formal correspondence to a boss.
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The letter has a clear greeting and closing, contributing to a good formal structure.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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