It is important to give children to act independently and make their own decisions from early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea

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Throughout both developed and developing nations, the issue of allowing younger generations to take decisions, sparked a series of heated arguments between critics. In my personal
opinion I
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opinion, I
believe that children should be allowed to take some
decision
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only after they achieve
they
of them or themselves
their
certain maturity level. In
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essay I will appeal for the former view by using illustrations from The Times News Paper and USA Government. In the current era, infants need to be agile to cope with
current notion
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current notions
the current notion
of the world. It is extremely hard and nearly impossible to determine an ideal age of maturity, until infants
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meet
certain requirements, they should only be allowed to participate and provide their views when some
decision
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are made so they can use it as a reference when making
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decision
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a decision
decisions
in future. In
recent article
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a recent article
the recent article
of The Times Newspaper, it was shown that 80% of
university
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students in London are exploring their careers in different fields than the ones they studied and the main reason behind
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was poor
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they made at
early age
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an early age
when applying for
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in
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university
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the university
. Education
play
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plays
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a
major role in an individual’s life and one needs to carefully perform some analysis and research before applying for higher or
university
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education. Infants are easy to manipulate and they can be driven easily with non-useful leisure attractions provided by educational institutes to get them enrolled in any program or subject so they can have those perks. A survey from
USA Government
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the USA Government
shows evidence that 70% young students apply for the
university
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programs only because they have only 5 classes a week. To summaries the analysis and examples mentioned, I do believe that an individual has rights to choose what they desire for certain
things but
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things, but
I do support the statement that children should not be allowed to take decisions independently until they reach
certain age
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a certain age
and gain enough maturity.
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