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Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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With the advent of fast
food
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 culture, there is a steep rise in unhealthy and obese people around the world. To restate, Obesity is one of the major concerns of
developed
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developing
 countries. There are several ways to tackle
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 epidemic, which would be discussed in
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 essay.
Firstly
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, the
food
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 choice plays a major role in the people being overweight weight. Despite the
fact
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 that, eating fast
food
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 causes major complications, most of the people choose to eat them.
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, eating
food
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 with ingredients unknown to us, leads to health
detoriation
a symptom of reduced quality or strength
deterioration
. The study conducted by university of Boston, provides a link between eating the chemical laden, fried foods and cancer. In my opinion, the people should be selective while consuming
food
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 in restaurants. Despite, the
fact
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 that fast
food
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 is dangerous to health, most of the people in wealthy countries, spend
major chunk
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a major chunk
 of their salary towards eating outside.
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 transcends to a
fact
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 that, persons with
good amount
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a good amount
 of disposable income do not care about their spending.
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, due to the
fact
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 that, unhealthy meals come at a lower price than healthy
food
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, people tend to eat it on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. Which, leads to productivity in major fast
food
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 chains by opening their restaurants everywhere.
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