The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

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The first chart which shows the results of a survey of 100,000 people asking if they

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abroad and why they

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for the period 1994-98 and the

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most of the people

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abroad for holidays mainly to Western Europe. The rest of the sample asked in

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survey their answers varied

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about why they have

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abroad, business was the most common answer after holidays, followed by visiting friends and families but the order of these answers did not change through the 5 years of the survey. The main destinations did not

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vary Western Europe remained the most visited region abroad followed by other areas and the least visited region was North America.

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summary, most people by UK residents travel abroad for holidays and their main destination is Western Europe.

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