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many people are spending a lot of money on their wedding. do you thing its a good idea?

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A large number of people consuming a huge
amount
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 of
money
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 on their wedding.I d
ont
do not
don't
think it's g
ood idea
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a good idea
to spend
such
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 huge
amount
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 on wedding festivities. These days there is a trend of spending a lot of
money
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 on wedding functions just to make other people happy. In my point of view, wedding is a holy ritual and i
t
it is
it's
between two people who are going to start their life together and
thus
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 it can
also
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 be done with m
inimal
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a minimal budget
budget
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 and by inviting close friends and families. But these d
ays wedding
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days, weddings
days weddings
day wedding
day day wedding
h
as become
Suggestion
have become
a show off of the
money
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.
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.
People are judging
one
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's class on
this
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 b
asis and
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basis, and
so, they are spending crazily without even thinking of their
budget
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 and even going i
n
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into
 d
epts
the state of owing something (especially money)
debts
by spending a large
amount
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 of
money
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 on n
umber
Suggestion
a number
the number
of w
eddings functions,
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weddings, functions
 expensive wedding dresses, several n
umber
Suggestion
numbers
of food dishes in weddings and many more useless spendings. People who can afford high profile weddings they should not spend huge
money
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 on their w
eddings
Suggestion
wedding
as well. They should set an example of low
budget
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 wedding so that the
one
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 who can afford that type of wedding d
oesnt
does not
doesn't
have any inferiority complex and they will
also
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 spend on wedding according to their
budget
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.
Instead
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 of spending huge
amount
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 of
money
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 on weddings
one
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 should save it for their future or they can do charity as well to help the needy. w
edding
Suggestion
The wedding
Wedding
A wedding
is just a
one
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 day function after f
ew days
Suggestion
a few days
no
one
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 will r
member
recall knowledge from memory; have a recollection
remember
i
t but
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it, but
the person who is going in d
epts
Suggestion
Depts
depths
diets
just a for a day to make other people happy will spend r
est
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the rest
of his life under i
t's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
burden. W
edding
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A wedding
can
also
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 be done with simplicity. In order to make
this
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 society better,
one
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 should not u
sed
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use
all their
money
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 for useless festivities.
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 of that they should help poor with that
money
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. They should set examples of simple weddings for others.

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