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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is true that some people argue that a foreign
language
 should not be one of the compulsory subjects studied in schools. While I believe that it is useful for
schoolchildren
Suggestion
school children
 to learn a foreign
language
, I agree completely that they should not be forced to do so. On the one hand, it will benefit the education of most children if they are encouraged
learn
Suggestion
to learn
 a foreign
language
 during their school years.
Firstly
, through studying the
language
 they will learn about the culture of that country, and some schools even arrange exchange visits, to enable students to briefly immerse themselves in the culture of the foreign country whose
language
 they are learning.
Secondly
, children can access information in another
language
.
For example
, if they are studying English, they can enjoy websites which are only available in English on any topic in which they are interested.
Finally
, children can be encouraged to learn a foreign
language
 through the range of enjoyable and fun materials available nowadays, especially interactive online learning.
On the other hand
, it would be counterproductive to forcibly oblige schoolchildren to learn a foreign
language
. One reason is that children will not learn effectively through compulsion alone. They must be motivated to do so and
this
 is only achieved through enthusiastic teachers who select stimulating
language
-learning activities. Another reason is that
schoolchildren
Suggestion
school children
 will be reluctant to learn a foreign
language
 if they cannot see why it might be relevant to their present or future lives.
For example
, individual Vietnamese pupils should not be forced to learn English if they are certain that they will never need or want to use it in the future. In conclusion, I would argue that schools should encourage, but not compel, children to learn a foreign
language
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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