Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets, many small local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are the num
ber
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is
of supermarkets growing faster today than in the past and
this
trend has influenced many individual stores getting harder to run their business. I completely agree with some critics saying that if too many local stores went bust, the residental
society wi
used or designed for residence or limited to residences
residential
ll not be aware of its anymore
.
the thing named or in question
it
Firstly
, many small business ar
e not ab
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businesses
le to use price strategy to attract consumers since people tend to purchase products in supermarket chains. The reason usually is that many supermarkets provide much cheaper price due to the amount of the product orders from suppliers in one time
.
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at
Therefore
,
this
changed shopping st
yle cause loca
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shopping, style
l
groc
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causes
eries lose the majority of consumers w
hich are not able to ea
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which consumers are not
rn many profit
s, resulting
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profits, many
in gradually losing competitiveness in community.
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the community
When it comes to supermarket chains, even though its automation check-out s
ystem hel
the act of inspecting or verifying
checkout
ps consumers to purchase products efficiently
and time-s
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efficient
efficiency
aving, people gradually do not have interaction with others.
For instance
, before supermarket comes out, housewives not only go to goceries to
purchas
a marketplace where groceries are sold
groceries
e daily necessities
but
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necessities, but
also
to catch up with their neighbors o
r people
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
who live in the same area when they bump into in the
shops. So if man
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into the shops
y local small stores close down, it is likely to affect people's life because they are not par
ticularly have many chanc
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are not particularly having
do not particularly have
does not particularly have
have not particularly had
es to talk with each other. In conclusion, there is unavoidable to say that growing up supermarkets chains have been threatening local business in the views of the fact that individuals cannot get much cheape
r price to order p
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much cheaper prices
a much cheaper price
roducts from suppliers.
As a result
, when people start to only shop in supermarkets, its convenience brings people gradually not really to get involved with others. It is generally not a positive effect on community.
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the community
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