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Some people believe today that everyone has a right to access to the Internet and that governments should provide this access for free. Other people believe that access to the internet is not a right and should be paid for like other services. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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The
internet
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 is now not considered to be a luxury, but a necessity. Some say that governments should make
access
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 to the world wide web free of charge, while the others argue that everyone must pay to
access
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. I strongly believe that
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 to the
internet
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 should be 100% free. Free
access
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 to the
internet
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 will be a financial burden to all of the citizens.
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, we are all aware that running a business
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 as, an
internet
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service
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 provider is extremely costly.
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, providing
internet
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 to a whole nation for free would be a huge task and requires a great amount of funding. Even if an individual does not use
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service
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, implementation and maintenance costs of high end tech
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 as servers and undersea cables must be paid eventually by the tax payer's.
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, an elderly person who is in her 80s living from her pension would
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 be affected as the government will need to gather the funds to keep the
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 free.
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, it is in the best interest of all the citizens who use the
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 to pay for
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service
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.
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, people who are in favour of non paid
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service
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 argues that the country's young generation will have clear advantages should the
service
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 be free.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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