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The gas and oil are gain around the world by people and people used to the fuel due to all of them have luxurious

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The gas and oil are
gain
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gaining
 around the world by people and people used
to
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in
 the
fuel
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 due to all of them have
luxurious
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luxuries
, many people believe that we must be researching
to
being one more than one
two
 other places for augmenting
fuel
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. I can neither completely agree nor disagree with
this
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 statement. Discuss both views and give your opinion, many people think that it is, so, as far as I am concerned, we used to decrease
fuel
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 in us
.
Accept space
.
First
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,
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,
 nowadays many entertainment venues use
fuel
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such
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 as pool which produces hot water, many people have a pool
in house
Suggestion
in, the house
in the house
 so, I completely agree, we must
finding
Suggestion
find
 a new place for
fuel
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,
therefore
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 if we find new
energy
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 which won't finish, very benefit for future and life till end
fuel
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.
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.
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this
Suggestion
This
energy
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 might create by unclear and blowing
.
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.
we
Suggestion
We
 better find other
energy
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 till help problem environment as air pollution
,
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,
 greenhouse gases, genetic modification of crops, waste production, population grow water pollution, deforestation, urban sprawl, natural resource use, polar ice caps and etc.
On the other hand
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, we should create a backup for
energy
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 because of the
last
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, we will be lost gas and oil.
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however
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However
, one issue is that we will end up potentially jeopardizing what are beautiful landscapes and people use their cars for everything. These cities have to develop and improve public transportation in order to increase the index of accessibility. To sum up:
although
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 there is an advantage of finding new places to get oil and gas, which is that we can sustain and improve our living standards, the negative impacts outweigh
this
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 as we will damage those environments, as well as continue to harm our health and the planet.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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