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This
 line graph shows the
consumption
 of
margarine
, low fat and reduced spreads and
butter
 between 1981 and 2007 and is measured in grams. Overall, it can be seen that the
consumption
 of both
margarine
 and
butter
 decreased, unlike low fat which increased. There was a significant fall in the
consumption
 of
butter
. The
butter
consumption
 stood at about 145 grams, which is the highest across all spreads. The amount of
butter
 consumed dropped massively over the 26 years and it finished at about 50 grams.
In contrast
,
margarine
 experienced
slightly less drop
Suggestion
a slightly less drop
 than
butter
, starting at about 90 grams and it did hit a low of 40 at the end of the period.
Although
 low fat and reduced spreads
consumption
 did not start until mid-1996, unlike
butter
 and
margarine
, it witnessed a massive increase in the
grams
Suggestion
gram
consumption
 than the other spreads. The
consumption
 of low fat and reduced spreads levelled off at 70 grams, the highest across the other spreads.

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