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Recent research has shown that media like the internet and TV has a greater influence over people’s lives than politicians. Which do you consider to be the greater influence? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Everybody tends to be aware of what is presently going on and to keep in touch with the outside world,
as a result
, most people spend much time watching TV and browsing the internet to cope magisterially with the extreme changes that happen around. As a matter of fact, TV and media with its various means play a vital role in enhancing people’s awareness of their rights and duties towards their countries.
In addition
, they are used in some political movements where the government heads for having more power against their p
rotestors.
a formal and solemn declaration of objection
protests
Nevertheless
, there are several attempts from those opponents to keep an eye on the violation of human rights for the sake of disclosing facts to the public. Persuading the majority of people into supporting ideas and plans is a s
killful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
mission, but it's not straightforward. Each party struggles for gaining sympathy to their agendas throughout utilizing some worldly-wise veterans of political issues who have stately diplomatic leverage that can fancy their audience;
hence
 they can hold all the cards and maintain dominance over the other parties and their peoples, too. Quite frankly, I believe that TV and the internet have m
ore considerable impact
Suggestion
a more considerable impact
and appeal rather than politicians for two reasons:
first
 of all, as I've mentioned above, a big number of people resort to using the internet at most cases, and
therefore
 they gain much information and a myriad of different opinions on a specific matter.
Secondly
, some politicians have no principles, i
.
refers to the speaker or writer
I
e. t
hey
Suggestion
They
are always advocating for the winning side which led to a credibility gap between them and their nations, in consequence, they sorrowfully lost their effect.

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