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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Discuss.

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Nowadays, people are more aware about worldwide crimes for TV, social media, newspapers always record what is daily happening. In
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 frame, the common belief supports the idea that
prison
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 represents the best
punishment
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 for all kinds of crimes.
However
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, as in many circumstances, try to generalize it is not the rational way
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and, in
 fact, in
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 essay, I will illustrate the pros and the drawbacks of
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 phenomenon. Let's begin by looking at
advantages
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the advantages
. I believe that a
prison
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 sentence after a legal trial, can be considered as a threat for those who are planning to do some crimes. Scaring or
threating
(of flora or fauna) likely in the near future to become endangered
threatened
 by the idea to finish their life in
prison
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, maybe people are less prone to commit crimes.
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, the
prison
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 represents a life of loneliness far from home or families, without freedom and for those relevant crimes it figures out as the best
punishment
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 possible.
This
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 is valid both for protecting and stick up for harming
people but
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people, but
also
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 for punishing illegal behaviour in order to teach and rehabilitate criminals. Turning to
other side
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the other side
 of the argument, the
prison
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setence
a string of words satisfying the grammatical rules of a language
sentence
stance
 in not always correct. Many
crimes in
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crimes, in
 fact can be considered as 'minor' crimes as fraud or
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 and sometime criminals are forced to severe judgement and
punishment
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 even if they don't really need to be
rehabilitate
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rehabilitated
. In these special cases, we should find
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 kind of
punishment
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 to redeem them. All the things considered, a
prison
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 sentence should always be considered in a critical and smart way. You need to
weugh
have a certain weight
weigh
 up and balance the pros of
punish
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punishing
 huge crimes and defeat harmed people and the cons of
punish
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punishing
 with unfair
judgemnet
the legal document stating the reasons for a judicial decision
judgement
 minor crimes. Personally, I believe the benefits in
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 criminals with balanced and critical
punishment
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.
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