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Task 2: The Quality of life in large cities is decreasing. What could be the reasons behind this. What measures can be taken to solve this problem?

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With the industrialization, it is inevitable that more people will relate from rural regions to urban cities in order to seek for a better living
environment
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 and better opportunities in careers.
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, the large
migration
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 will contribute to the worsening living
environment
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 for local residents due to many factors.
Migration
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 from rural to urban area leads to
population
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 growth in large cities. High
population
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 density will lead to people's more demand of food, housing and entertainment.
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, limited resources and services in cities can not meet the residents’ basic needs. Overcrowded people in cities, especially in in
ner city area,
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inner city areas
the inner city area
will contribute poor living
environment
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, high unemployed rate and crime rates.
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, they
also
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 result in
traffic
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 congestion in cities due to increase in
transport
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 vehicles, especially in private cars.
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 but not the least, increasing
migration
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also
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 results in environmental pollution in the regions. More garbages and wastes will produced by over
population
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 and industrialization. More exhausted toxic gases will be emitted into at
mosphere b
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the atmosphere
y increased public transportation. All these will contribute in
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to
he worse living
environment
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 for local residents in large cities. With the increasing inevitable
migration
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 worldwide, proper methods should be carried out by local governments in order to maintain high quality of urban lifestyle.
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, it is necessary for governments to increase budgets in housing and facilities construction to meet the increasing demand of climbing
population
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. More affordable housing will provide a healthy living
environment
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 for residents. The development of cities,
such
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 as building new houses and facilities and maintaining the building
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 create jobs in the work force. With proper employment rate, the crime rate might be reduced.
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, investing money in public
transport
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 system improvement will relieve the
traffic
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 congestions and attract more residents to use public
transport
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 rather than driving their own cars.
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, the number of private cars will reduce on the road and
traffic
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 congestion will be relieved. As stated above, the quality of life in large cites is affected by increasing
migration
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 from rural area to urban cities. The factors which lead to worsen living
environment
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 in cities include high density
population
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, dirty li
ving hygiene,
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living, hygiene
traffic
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 congestion and increasing crime rates.
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, in order to maintain the inner city living
environment
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, city governments should increase bu
dget i
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the budget
n housing and facilities construction and improvement of public
transport
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • affordable housing
  • air quality
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • pollution control
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