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some people think that being able to communicate with others online is breaking down geographical barriers and enabling people , who would normally never have the chance to meet, to communicate . what are the advantages of international communication online ? are there any disadvantages to this ?

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Recently, communicating with others online is becoming increasingly popular, and has been studied in multiple domains
such
 as social science and technology.
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 what are the pros and if there are any cons to
this
 kind of
communication
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is
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Is
 considered one of the most controversial issues today
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In
this
 essay I am going to examine
this
 phenomenon from both viewpoints
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 On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits considerably outweigh the disadvantages. The main reason for believing
this
 is the ability to contact and interact with others all around the world from your house, which is incredibly helpful and beneficial for most individuals in several ways. Education,
for
example is
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example, is
 one of them, people can share ideas, knowledge and improve their skills via online
communication
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On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to consider the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact for teenagers, young adult or even
children
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children's
 online
communication
 with strangers and unknown users could be dangerous especially if it is done without any
parents
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parental
parent
 control. To illustrate, according to a recent study done by the American University
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 60% of cyber fraud processes
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are done
 to under 18 years old users
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 As we have seen
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 there is no easy answer to
this
 question
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 To balance,
however
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 I tend to believe that the positives outweigh the negatives because the internet including online
communication
 is in my opinion the future
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 an easier and more developed
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society
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