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Nowadays for many people internet is replacing books. What is your opinion?

#people #internet #books
With the advent of technology over a decade, the
internet
 is now in our
packets
a small pouch inside a garment for carrying small articles
pockets
 with
plethora
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a plethora
the plethora
 of data available on it. Some believe that the
internet
 will replace the need of owning books. I completely agree with
this
 notion as online books
is
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are
 more beneficial for the
environment
 and is accessible from any electronic device which makes it more accessible. To start with, manufacturing paper requires cutting of trees which is harmful for the planet. People are becoming more aware about the
environment
 are being
taking
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taken
 every step to mitigate harm.
For example
, to make a single
book
 of 500 pages, a whole tree needs to be cut and now imaging printing books in hundred
thousands
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thousand
. Whereas downloading an ebook online leaves
zero footprint
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a zero footprint
 of
environment
.
Hence
, paper production leaves a huge negative footprint on
nature whereas
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nature, whereas
 reading books on the
internet
 does none. To add
further
, the accessibility of almost every
book every
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book, every
 published available on the
internet
 is something every reader would want. The
internet
 is available on phones, laptops, tablets and other digital devices which makes it convenient for the reader to continue reading the
book
 on which whichever device is available at that instant. To exemplify, I own a kindle which I use quite frequently to read books online.
Although
 I do not carry around with me all the time, but I can still continue with the same
book
 on
phone
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the phone
 when I am commuting or on my laptop when I am at my office. Whereas I would need to carry a
book
 wherever I go and carry to bag even if not required just to carry the
book
.
Therefore
, with the
internet
 available on all devices all the time, syncing books
is
Suggestion
are
possible which
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possible, which
 makes it accessible all the time. In conclusion, our increasing care for the
environment
 makes people lean towards books online as compared to physical books.
Also syncing
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Also, syncing
 of books on the
internet
 is
also
 a major factor for
diminishing use
Suggestion
the diminishing use
 of books.
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