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Nowadays, some buildings such as offices and schools have open-space design instead of separate rooms. Why is it so? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is increasingly common to see
work
 places and schools have open space designs, there are many reasons why
this
 style of architecture is popular with the major reason being
that is
 low cost and I believe it is more of a negative trend than a positive one.
To begin
, the popularity of open floor designs is on a rise in most
cities mainly
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cities, mainly
 because it is cheaper to construct than the alternative. Presently, the cost of making older style offices has
skyrocketed leaving
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skyrocketed, leaving
 most companies with the option of using
open plan
Suggestion
the open plan
an open plan
 for offices or schools.
Therefore
, in the
abscence
the state of being absent
absence
 of doors and walls
,
Accept space
,
 more staffs can
work
 in the
work
 space available, desks are joined together or separated by
small amount
Suggestion
a small amount
 of room. Building offices with open floor plans is a negative development because it leads to a noisy environment where the staff would not be able to concentrate properly on the task at hand
.
Accept space
.
Moreover
, the perpetually
nosiy
full of or characterized by loud and nonmusical sounds
noisy
 atmosphere could make one easily agitated.
Also
, with
this
 type of design, communicable diseases can easily spread from person to person because a large number of people are utilizing the same air. According to Business Daily Magazine, a lot of staffs at Google office in Abuja who were at the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of the Monkey Pox outbreak
last
 year were inclined to believe that if they were not
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 tightly packed in their office
,
Accept space
,
the disease would not have spread as fast as it did. To conclude, the main reason for the surge in the presence of open plan offices and schools is its cheap cost.
Furthermore
, the fact that
this
 floor design leads to poor concentration due to noise, thereby reducing
work
 output, and
also
 facilitates the quick spread of communicable diseases makes it a negative development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • open-space design
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • interaction
  • flexible use of space
  • activities and needs
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • spontaneous discussions
  • idea sharing
  • noise levels
  • distractions
  • concentration
  • productivity
  • privacy
  • confidentiality
  • secluded areas
  • private conversations
  • sense of community
  • shared purpose
  • inclusive environment
  • engaging environment
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