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Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better?

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To begin
 with, it is common that some high schools do not require their students to wear uniforms. They believe that uniforms should not be the main concern of education, and schools should focus more on the curriculum quality and learning process than focusing on dresses.
Besides
 that, they
also
 believe that spending on
school
 uniforms is
also
 a waste of money, as the fund could be allocated for other important matters
such
 as books or stationary.
On the other hand
, for a number of reasons many secondary education institutions necessitate their students to wear
school
 uniforms. These institutions believe that by wearing
school
 uniforms, students will learn about discipline; and how to wear proper and formal clothing. By allowing the students to wear free clothes, there might be a risk that students will wear inappropriate clothing during
school
 hours. And
then
 with the existence of
school
 uniforms, it will not differentiate the economic class of students.
Although
 some students might come from a wealthy family, they must wear the same quality clothing as the other students who come from various backgrounds. In conclusion, it is a fact that wearing
school
 uniforms has become mandatory for several secondary education institutions, but there are other institutions who allow their students to decide their own clothes. Both points of views have their own advantages, but I believe that wearing
school
 uniforms for high
school
 students is more favourable than wearing free clothes.
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