Some people believe that money is the best gift for teenagers while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many believe that
money
is the best
gift
for children while others do not think so and are believed purchasing something is more convenient
instead
of giving
money
. I firmly believe
money
can be considered as a way of giving
present but
Suggestion
present, but
presentations but
presence but
presentation but
it is not the best approach. Some individuals have been
thought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
monetary as an easiest way to make
gift
especially for teenagers is not appropriate because,
first
of all, it means that you do not care about that person and only are doing your task in other word in
this
way you do not dedicate your
precise
characterized by feeling or showing fond affection for
precious
time to think and find something and you just need put some
money
into a pocket and done!
Moreover
, it
can be lead
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can lead
can be led
to some unwanted petty
crime
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crime, for
for instance
, purchasing cigarette or alcoholic drinking etc. All in all people who are against
,
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,
bold
this
cons and have been believed we should purchase something appropriate and what they need according to their age. While the rest are considered some cash can make youngsters more happy in comparison to the ordinary and usual
gift
. They think
this
sort of giving present can make teenagers able to opt they
gift
according to their demands.
For example
,
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,
these days children save some of their pocket
money
to purchase an expensive merchandise
such
as
smart phone
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smart phones
a smart phone
or game console
,
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,
so by giving
money
we can help them to attain their needs and teach and motivate them to save some of their income when they get a job. All in all, they think
money
is the best
gift
for youngsters. In conclusion
,
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,
I do agree with the
second
point of view and believe
money
might be one of the best approach to give our present to
teenagers but
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teenagers, but
it is a double-edge
gift
and we should consider carefully about it.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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