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Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

Living in a rural area for children is considered as the best option by a group of people, while other believes in children’s overall development,
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life
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 provides the best opportunities overall. In my opinion, a
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 designed with a touch of the
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 and more open space is the best place to raise the
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 generation. On the one hand, the countryside offers a unique touch of
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, a
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 with animals and different plants and flowers, provide a great environment for children to grow in their personal
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. It allows them to understand and protect the
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, they have more freedom and less worries for their security.
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, the open space allows them to play outside and live the
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 with every minor natural thing, whereas in the
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 children are busy with the digital world
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, the school education quality is not high compared to
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 standards, which makes negative aspect of kids’ abilities
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 the school curriculum.
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, schools in metropolitan areas offer the best education, which helps a kid in their adult
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, institutions give opportunity for extracurricular activities including all types of sports and art skills. Even if the school doesn’t provide one skill lessons, there are numerous alternate options are easily available to pursue the passion in the relevant field. Apart from
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, due to competition, a child can learn different
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 skills and personality attributes.
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, the security is less and children do not have open space to play outside. To sum up, I believe even though countryside provides great opportunity to raise children in the natural environment,
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 lifestyle makes children best capable for future endeavours and challenges.
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, ideal
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 should be designed in
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 a way that everybody feel safe and have parks to get the essence of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city
  • countryside
  • children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • opportunities
  • social interactions
  • nature
  • physical health
  • mental health
  • farming
  • responsibility
  • hard work
  • noisy
  • crowded
  • stress
  • isolation
  • entertainment
  • friends
  • experience
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