Smacking children is the best way to keep children in discipline . To what extent do you agree?

For centuries corporal
punishement
the act of punishing
punishment
has been used against children. Many believe that
this
is the only way to keep
childreen
a young person of either sex
children
from
missbehaving
behave badly
misbehaving
but is it though? Pain, pain is a strong leash that one could use against someone. Our innate nature tend to avoid pain,
for
instance observe
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instance, observe
how your hand flinches
autmotically
in a reflex manner
automatically
away from fire because of the hurt.
Similarly
, parents who strike their children are applying a deep psychological concept; Inflicting hurt when they
missbehave
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miss behave
so the feeling is imprinted in their memory
desuading
turn away from by persuasion
dissuading
deciding
them from
missbehaving
behave badly
misbehaving
again. Some parents believe that
this
way they are doing a good job, that they are
rasing
increasing in quantity or value
raising
rushing
racing
good well-disciplined kids. And as much as the target is achieved, it is achieved through fear.
Physical pain
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The physical pain
was never the answer if anything, it's more destructive. Hitting children makes them feel helpless, wound their pride and leave them with nothing but anger and hate. It might even make matters worse. Many children who get beaten up show aggressive behaviour; bullying their
collegues
an associate that one works with
colleagues
colleges
, breaking the rules, getting involved in fights...
etc.
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Etc.
Corporal
punishement
the act of punishing
punishment
can have a reserved effect as many children would
missbehave
behave badly
misbehave
as a statement and that's not even half of it. Modern research
show
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shows
has shown
that physical abuse affects children's mental health and make them prone to deviation. The list goes on to what horrible side-effects it
have
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has
. I strongly disagree that striking children is the best way to keep them in
discpline
a branch of knowledge
discipline
. I believe that it's cruel and wrong. There are hundreds of other ways to make children behave. Take
talking
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talking, for
for instance
, you could achieve so much through talking and communicating your thoughts to others. Establishing a connection with your kids is important, making them feel respected and listened can do miracles. You'd find that they are more inclined to listen to you if you're kind and respectful. In the end, it is only through mutual respect that one could achieve what he desires. And so even if striking does the job it's still a
degarding
harmful to the mind or morals
degrading
method to use regardless of your intentions. Love, kindness and respect are the answer.
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