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According to a recent study, the more people use the internet, the less time they spend with real humans begins. Should we worry about the effect this is having on social interaction or should we see the internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities worldwide? Discuss these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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During the past 50 years, the rapid advances increase in technology and especially the access to the
internet
 has had an immense impact
in
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on
 everyday life. We live
life
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a life
 very
different
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differently
 from what our grandparents and parents were used
to experience
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to experiencing
. Transportation and
communication
 has become more effective and
human
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humane
humanistic
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 has been replaced with new robots.
Although
 Even though, none of
this
 would have been possible without the
internet
,
this
 technological development has impacted an impact on how society is interacting nowadays. The
internet
Internet
 has been the driving force behind the main reason of the technological transformation and industrial development.
Example
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The example Internet
Internet
 has changed the way businesses are conducted.
Communication
 is fast and effective with no cost coast.
Internet
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The internet
 has allowed us to keep in contact with family and friends that live far away from
as
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
 with no effort. Doing business has never been easier, especially because the
internet
 has made it possible to work from home. What’s more
/
additionally
, Not just that, buying a concert ticket or paying rent/ transferring funds into a different account can be done from the comfort of your house with an
internet
 connection. Definitely, It
can not
can not
cannot
 be argued that/ Without a doubt, the
internet
 has opened a new way to communicate and relate to people where
face
 to
face
communication
 it is not necessary. The use of the
internet
has decreased
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is decreasing
 everyday human interactions
,
Accept space
,
 impacting primarily on people’s social
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Accept space
??
skills
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Skills
. Mainly, the lack of personal human interactions affects mainly on people's capacity to be empathetic,
therefore
 we care less, and we do not relate as much to others.
This
 makes communities weaker wicker where individuals become isolated. These circumstances have been directly related to mental health issues like depression and anxiety. In conclusion, the
internet
 has provided us with many benefits in different areas like
communication
, transportation and
business but
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business, but
 we need to be aware that we
also
 need to value and cultivate authentic personal relationships
face
 to
face
communication
 and experiences. At the end
,
Accept space
,
In the end
/
At the end of the day humans are social creatures and they need from other people in order to have more meaningful and
healthy
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healthier
 lives.

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