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In many countries, people decide to have a child at a later age. Why is this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the modern society, many couples have delayed parenthood unlike in the past. There are some reasons behind
this
 trend, and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly believe that there are
for
being one more than three
four
 more drawbacks than benefits to
this
 development.
To begin
 with, a few reasons can be given to justify the trend of giving birth at later stages of
life
.
First
, the labour market is becoming
competitive
Suggestion
more competitive
 and it is quite normal that parents decide not to have a child during the early years of their marriage.
In other words
, as women start to pursue higher studies and enter the workforce, they tend to delay their marriage and have children later in their
life
; they cannot balance family and work due to the responsibilities of childbearing and parenting.
Second
, some couples do not want to sacrifice their social
life
 by having children when they are young. To be more precise, having children during the initial years of their marriage will deprive them of the opportunity to enjoy
life
 as they want.
For example
, the majority of young couples prefer travelling and enjoying their
life
 to sitting at home and raising their children
On the other hand
, I feel that there are several negative effects
to
Suggestion
of
this
 trend.
First
, delaying pregnancy can lead to some health complications. Fertility starts to decline after the age of thirty, and babies born after
this
 age can have
higher risk
Suggestion
a higher risk
 of health conditions
such
 as Down`s syndrome and other genetic birth defects.
Second
, having a child later can cause a significant age gap between the two generations and
this
 will make it harder for parents to communicate with their children.
Besides
, it will be financially demanding for parents to send their young children to colleges or universities when they are close to retirement or universities, and
this
 could mean delayed or difficult retirement for parents. To conclude, People prefer having children later in
life
 because they want to improve their career and enjoy their social
life
;
however
, I strongly believe that the demerits of
this
 development far outweigh the merits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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