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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do advantages of this trend outweigh disadvantages?

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These days a large number of couples decide to have babies after spending at least
few years
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a few years
 since their marriage. According to some experts, there are various reasons which urge parents to have children later in their
life
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.
Career
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, changes in social
belief
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, women empowerment, escalating living expenses, increased
life
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 expectancy are some of the major causes of
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 trend. In my
belief
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 advantages of having children later in
life
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 outweigh its demerits.
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, a growing number of parents are very passionate and enthusiastic in terms of
career
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 development and their profession is the primary reason they do not expect to have children in the early stage of their marriage. It is intuitively obvious that in
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 age of huge competition, unemployment and economic crisis, people around the world are constantly worried about their
career
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 and job promotions.
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, parents decide and determine to postpone their
first
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 childbirth.
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, women empowerment has changed the old way of
life
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 where a woman's sole responsibility was to look after the children. Since many wives are working these days, they decide to take babies after they reach a stable job position.
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, social
belief
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 regarding giving birth of children has changed dramatically and people are more concerned about the living expenses than the number of babies they have, unlike older generations.
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, parents who study full-time in universities
can not
can not
cannot
 concentrate on their studies competently if they become parents. Enhanced
life
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 expectancy and changes in the social
belief
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 are two other reasons for
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 trend.
Undeniably people
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Undeniably, people
 who either work or run a business can reach to a stable position before becoming parents.
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 they can take better care of their
babies which
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babies, which
 would have been impossible if the baby was born earlier. It is often a fact that having offspring early in
life
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 can escalate expenditures and financial responsibilities of parents.
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, if the parents cannot allocate time for them, they grow up with psychological issues.
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 young parents often lack the knowledge and
time
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the time
 they need to properly take care the baby. Ultimately, parents might put their
career
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 at a risk as well as the future of their children if they become parents before they are mentally and economically stable. Reversely, having offspring in early
life
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have
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has
 few advantages.
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 parents have new members in their family and their isolation would be extirpated and they will become more family-oriented. In conclusion, despite the pleasure of having a new baby in
early years
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the early years
 of marriage, parents who decide to have babies later can primarily, readily and precisely focus on their
career
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, can easily
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 financial requirements and have sufficient time to persist, strive and struggle in order to have a stunning, and illuminated future in
life
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritization
  • financial stability
  • educational prospects
  • personal development
  • health advancements
  • fertility options
  • economic uncertainties
  • parenthood
  • societal norms
  • life experience
  • generational gap
  • upbringing
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