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Band 5.5

Task 2: Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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It goes without saying that
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internet
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the internet
 is one of the greatest
invention
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inventions
 in twenty
first
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 century and it is significantly improving day by day. Today,
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internet
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the internet
 is generally accepted as a fast
communication
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medium
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medium, thus
thus
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,
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,
some people believe it can
makes
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make
 the
world
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 smaller by reducing the
communication
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 gap
among
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between
 us. To a some extent, I agree with the statement because, it can generally be observed that, limited number of drawbacks of the
internet
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 are usually overcome by
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 advantages in the terms of
communication
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. There are different opinions among people about the usage and side effects of the
internet
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. While people dwell on their ideas, I would like to bring forward my opinion to better side. Depending on the facts, half a percent of
world
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 population doesn't have an access to
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internet
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the internet
.
Thus
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, limited number of people around the
world
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 are getting
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
opportunities
 to experience the
internet
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 whether it delivers negative or positive outcomes.
This
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 trend is commonly seen in
developed
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developing
 nations
such
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 as USA, Australia
,
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,
as well as Europe.It has been reported that, to a some extent,
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internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is responsible for increasing criticism and break-up relationships in those countries.
On the other hand
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,
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Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 has been
dramatically
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dramatic
 change
communication
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 patterns around the
world
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. Nowadays,
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internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is considerably sustained with various demanding methods and tools of
communication
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such
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 as, social networks, Skype, E-mails and
internet
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 calling. Those technologies are helpful in bringing people together by providing
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world wide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
 access
with
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to
 an
internet
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. The latest social media technologies
such
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 as Facebook and
twitter
a series of chirps
Twitter
 allow their users to share their photos and videos
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 a matter of
second
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.
In
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addition security
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addition, security
 that provide by the
internet
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 is
also
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 useful when transferring confidential information through the network.
Thus
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,
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internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is a widely
use
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used
 for business
activities perhaps
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activities, perhaps
, people pay their charges on-line to buy products
then
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 the purchased good would be
deliver
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delivered
 to the door in the
next
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 morning. To sum up, the reinforced facts would
displays
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display
 the role of the
internet
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 in today's society. It is almost terminated the most difficult era of
communication
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.
which
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Which
 is clearly an opportunity to the people who live far from their families and now they can see and talk each other in a live environment. Yes, the
world
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 is suddenly become smaller
with
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by
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internet
Suggestion
the internet
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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