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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

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One of the major concerns all over the world is whether the agricultural sector can meet the growing demand for
food
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 worldwide.
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 issue is caused due to two main causes – the ever increasing
population
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 and extreme changes in climatic conditions.
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, it can be resolved through appropriate measures. The growing demand for
food
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 is caused by the ever increasing
population
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. Actually, over the
last
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 50 years, there was a drastic increase in human
population
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. In fact, world
population
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 is expected to increase from 7.9 billion in 2017 to 9.7 billion by 2050. Unfortunately,
food
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 production has not kept pace with. Climatic changes happening due to various reasons like depletion of ozone layer, acid rain and global warming have led to a decrease in the production of
food
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.
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,
this
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 situation could be remedied by farmers by increasing the area under cultivation and by using improved farming techniques.
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, yield can be increased by using quality fertilizers, improved methods of irrigation and modern techniques called precision farming.
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 to
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, the government needs to take active participation in educating farmers about the use of
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 techniques and products. The international community
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 needs to step in. Countries where
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 is surplus must show the willingness to export it to poor countries at a nominal price.
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 will ensure that everyone irrespective of their financial situation or nationality has access to three square meals a day. In conclusion, though
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population
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the population
 is increasing and climatic changes have damaged the current supply of
food
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 by using improved farming techniques and bringing more area under cultivation,
food
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 production can be stimulated.
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