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in many countries new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there what is your opinion ? give reasons and examples

#countries #homes #space #countryside #people
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the
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The
 demand for new residential paces is boosting nowadays.
inspite
Suggestion
In spite
Inspite
 the fact that there is no space for construction in cities, many people are still
againt
in contact with
against
 building in the
countyside
rural regions
countryside
.
in
Suggestion
In
 my opinion,
construcion
the act of constructing something
construction
 in the
countryside
Use synonyms
 is the suitable solution for
this
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 problem
.
Accept space
.
increasing
Suggestion
Increasing
 population leave no space for building
besides
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 rate of immigration from rural areas to cities is increasing today.
people
Suggestion
People
 leave the
countryside
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 in order to find better
jobes
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
 with reasonable salaries in cities which contribute to decrease
space
Suggestion
the space
 available for in cities
.
Accept space
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 definitely agree that it is
oue
of or belonging to us
our
responsability
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 to protect the
countryside
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 because it is the source of fresh food and fresh
air but
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air, but
 we can construct in uncultivated areas of it by preparing a plan for building and banning destroying any trees cultivated areas
.
Accept space
.
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furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, building in the
countryside
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 will be a chance
for
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of
transfering
transfer somebody to a different position or location of work
transferring
 all facilities and modern technology that
are
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is
 available in cities.
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
this
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 will attract eyes to the rural areas and many businessmen will start
business there
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a business, there
a business there
such
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 as opening restaurant and
shoppong
searching for or buying goods or services
shopping
 malls
,
Accept space
,
this
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 step will provide job
opportinities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 for people in the
countryside
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.
Accept space
.
to
Suggestion
To
 ensure that
construcion
the act of constructing something
construction
 companies will not destroy rural areas
,
Accept space
,
 the government can impose a supervision and fines on those companies
.
Accept space
.
in
Suggestion
In
 Egypt
,
Accept space
,
 there is an expansion in building in the rural places
.
Accept space
.
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for
Suggestion
For
 instance,
construcion
the act of constructing something
construction
 in the delta region has increased in the previous years
.
Accept space
.
to
Suggestion
To
 conclude,
although
Linking Words
protectiong
shielding (or designed to shield) against harm or discomfort
protecting
 the
countryside
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 is very
essentail
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
,
Accept space
,
 increasing population in
citios
the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)
sites
suits
are
Suggestion
is
 a big problem we face presently
sothat
Suggestion
so that
 building in the
countryside
Use synonyms
 will
releave
provide physical relief, as from pain
relieve
 traffic congestion in cities as well as improving the standard of living for people there
.
Accept space
.

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