Health experts say that obese women and women over the age of 40 should not be given free fertility treatment (IVF) because they are more likely to experience health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

There is no doubt that these days there is
increase
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an increase
in
smoking habit
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smoking habits
the smoking habit
. The question is
,
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,
way
the cause or intention underlying an action or situation, especially in the phrase 'the whys and wherefores'
why
is that and what can we do to
prevont
keep from happening or arising; make impossible
prevent
that? In
this
essay, I am going to discuss
this
phenomenon and draw my own conclusion.In terms of causes, smoking
dose
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does
not just
effect
have an effect upon
affect
how
smoke but
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smoke, but
also
how
smil
inhale the odor of; perceive by the olfactory sense
smell
smelt
the smoke. The main reason given to support
this
claim is that smoking is contagious. To illustrate, even how
want
Suggestion
wants
to stop
this
bad habit
can not
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can, not
because
evry
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
very
one he know smoke.
In other words
, smoking can
bengours
a pauper who lives by begging
beggars
also
for
unsmoking
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a smoking
an smoking
un smoking
people
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person
.
Thus it
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Thus, it
effect
Suggestion
affects
affect
the all society.
Moreover
, there are some solutions to tackle
this
phenomenon.
Firstly
,
govremant
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
can
forbiden
Suggestion
forbid
forbidding
forbidden
smoking in public places.
In other words
, due to that smoking will
decreases
Suggestion
decrease
beetwen
internal to, involving members of (a group of people)
between
individuals.
Secondly
, they can raise the prices of tobacco.
This
is because not all smoking people can
bay
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
buy
it.
Also they
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Also, they
can publish a health awareness on social media. In
conclusion it
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conclusion, it
is
evidnt
clearly revealed to the mind or the senses or judgment
evident
that the number of smoking people is in a large increase, but there are many solutions can be taken. The
govremant
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
and society must ensure steps are
tken
understood in a certain way; made sense of
taken
to
prevant
keep from happening or arising; make impossible
prevent
this
phenomenon from deteriorating
future
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
.

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Check your IELTS essays
After you write your essay, you will be provided with tips with examples of how to make your essay better in order to get a score above 7.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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