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Most people believe that stricter punishment should be given for traffic offences .To what extent do you agree

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The increase in the number of accidents on roads has become a major concern. Many people believe that strict punishments should be given for violation of
traffic
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 rules. I partially agree with
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 statement. According to my view, some other measures should
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 be taken along with strict punishment to eradicate
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traffic
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trafficking
 offences.
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 with, our law already had some well-defined rules and penalties for minor mistakes and cancellation of licenses for major offences. Imprisonment is
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 given for serious accidents.
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, the Indian government has imposed a strict penalty on people who drink and drive. The outcome of
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 act is tremendous. The new rules of the Tamil Nadu government for non helmet wearers have shown a huge impact on
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 offenders. A person who violates
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 rules more than 3 times will be fined double the amount of money that has to be paid
in
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into
 court or
local post office
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the local post office
. Though the laws tend to
decline the
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decline, the
 number of offenders, many people still violate the
traffic
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 rules. Some other measures have to be taken to reduce
traffic
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offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
fines
. One is by educating people about
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 laws. Many people do not have proper knowledge about the pros and cons of
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. The government should take
initiative
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the initiative
 to provide awareness campaigns about road safety and law. Another measure is installing surveillance cameras on the road. People follow the
traffic
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 rules to avoid being caught in the surveillance camera.
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, the driving license should only be provided to people who have undertaken training and completed the driving test.
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 not the case in all countries where some aspirants bribe the officials and get a license issued to them. Considering all the arguments, I conclude that strict punishments alone cannot control
traffic
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offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
. Some other measures must
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 be taken to reduce road accidents.

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