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Today, TV channels provide men’s sport shows more than women’s sports shows. Why? Should TV channels give equal time for women’s sport and men’s sport?

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These days, when it comes to
sport
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, a higher
number
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 of games played by men are broadcast, compared to that of women. A growing
number
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 of people having more interest in men’s sporting events
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 the main reason for
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 and I believe that equal attention should be paid to women’s
sport
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. The major factor leading television producers to prioritise men’s
sport
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 is that the
number
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 of men’s
sport
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 shows considerably outnumbers shows of their female counterparts. More viewers mean more profits, advertising contracts and sponsorship investments for the TV channels broadcasting the shows. Take football in Vietnam as an example. Men’s football match at the 30th SEA games attracted millions of people both from different parts of Vietnam and other neighbouring countries, while the figure for women’s match was significantly lower. Giving men’s
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 a higher priority is,
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, a wise strategy to earn large profits and attract more investment.
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, I would argue that TV
coverage
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 should not be biased towards men’s
sport
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 and that female athletes should be given equal opportunities. If men’s sports programmes continue to receive significantly more
coverage
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 than the programmes of their opposite sex, it might increase gender inequality, which is one of the most serious issues in many parts of the world today. Another thing is that there has been a dramatic increase in the
number
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 of people who have
interest
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an interest
 in women’s
sport
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 in recent years, and
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, television
coverage
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 should focus more on
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 area. In conclusion, a wider audience watching men’s sports channels is the most important reason why TV producers provide more men’s shows than
women’s
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woman
 shows, and I am of the opinion that there should be a greater equality in the
coverage
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 of men’s and women’s
sport
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.
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