These days, children tend to spend a great deal of time playing computer games. Some believe this is a beneficial trend while others think it is detrimental. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today's children spend a lot of time playing
computer
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games
instead
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of utilizing their time in other activities for recreation. In my view
computer
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games are detrimental for the generation and has more
demeritts
a mark against a person for misconduct or failure; usually given in school or armed forces
demerits
as compared to
merrits
a parliamentary state on the island of Mauritius
Mauritius
.
Computer
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games are played, sitting in a place and generally run for long sessions.
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makes children immobile causing lack of physical movements, a possible reason
to
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for
many health issues. I have noticed boys and girls getting very
possisive
serving to express or indicate possession
possessive
passive
while playing
computer
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games. They do not pay attention to any discussion while busy in their moves, engrossed in the
next
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target required, forgetting the surroundings, start reacting with dialogues. Many times even during sleep they continue their game level and screaming out names.
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effects
have an effect upon
affects
their
subconsious
just below the level of consciousness
subconscious
mind during development stage. Most of these machine generation games are based on fiction and focus only in winning. In many cases the other player is not known and
mear
used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs
more
virtual friend, away from the truth of life. There have been games introduced in market to name a few
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:
Blue Whale, Find a Partner, which motivated the players to suicide, develop
illieagel
prohibited by law or by official or accepted rules
illegal
relationships, robbery, murder and many other actions which are not accepted by the society and are considered as crime. The
phycological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
physiological
development is hindered with these immoral games. I strongly
disencourage
try to prevent; show opposition to
discourage
the
usage
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use
of
computer
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based games for the different health hazards, influence to immoral behaviour, lack of connectivity with the society and leading the teens towards
loniliness
the state of being alone in solitary isolation
loneliness
.
Outdoors
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Outdoor
games, board games are more bonding with family and friends who are physically present in front of us to motivate and guide.
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