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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging environment. What can government do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Nowadays, environmental issues appear more frequently and strongly than ever.
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 essay will discuss how the damages are caused, as well as the actions government and individuals can take to protect our environment. Two of the biggest problems are reforestation and air pollution that gr
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, authorities should introduce better farming methods to prevent felling trees from land which means, land is used more effectively. In conclusion, environmental problems are worrying concern and individual have a crucial role in joining hands with the government.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity loss
  • air pollution
  • climate change
  • water pollution
  • water scarcity
  • waste generation
  • improper disposal
  • overconsumption
  • resource depletion
  • government regulation
  • enforcement
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental regulations
  • environmental fines
  • education
  • awareness campaigns
  • individual responsibility
  • reduce
  • reuse
  • recycle
  • conserve
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • eco-friendly businesses
  • advocate
  • collaboration
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