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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons(for example new experiences ,career preparation increased knowledge etc ).Why do you think people attend colleges or universities ?

#people #colleges #universities #experiences #career #preparation
Dear Mr. Borges, As one of your business students from Studying without Boarders School, I would like to share my concerns about the recent changes in the school programme. The staff from the institution told me that I will no longer be able to have a work experience while studying, since there was a cancellation of the summer programme. The situation disappoints me, as the salary I would receive is necessary to pay for my travel costs,
as a result
, I may financial
difficults
an effort that is inconvenient
difficulties
difficult
 because of
this
 decision.
Moreover
, the lack of working experience may affect my immigration process in the country, since it cannot be replaced by hours of class.
Therefore
, I would appreciate if you sing my
transference
Suggestion
transfer
transferred
transferring
 to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 school without extra costs as well as my school records. I look forward to hearing from you. Cindy Sales
Submitted by bele_sales on

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