Children now adays spend a great deal of time watching television, however, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool which is why children are less well- educated today to what extend do you agree or disagree.

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in the long run children spend more
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some people believe that watching
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cannot replace the book as a learning tool. I completely agree
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cannot replace the books and
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, Internet and other computer devices are now embrace into
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because it is more attractive and enjoyable specially to the young people
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children who spend more
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watching television than reading books can be in a minor risk because
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are far more addictive and less accurate than reading books,
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is why children nowadays becoming less educated because
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program provides limited information and less accurate than those in books example to
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is a historical movies often mislead the viewer because in movies the director and scrip writer alters historical content. Books focuses on
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a specific topic
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