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In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large number of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Giving speech has been the main conventional method of teaching, especially when the number of audience is a lot. But, some individuals are considering that it should be gradually vanished in advantage of modern way of learning. I personally believe we are not able to halt
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 traditional method,
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 we can improve it to
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next level
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the next level
.
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 of all, by
abandon
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abandoning
 lectures in academic places
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 as universities and schools, we devastate the interaction between classmates and tutors and it can lead to decline in learning quality and other learning disorders. Secondary, without that, scholars lose their sense of competition. And
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, other methods of learning
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 as distance learnings are not appropriate for lots of practical fields needing experience and work in practice
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 as Doctors, Engineering and some job like plumbers, electricians etc. Because they have to work in action, online learning and
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 approaches are only suitable for theoretical syllabus and not for some more demands occupations.
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, taking advantage of
modern era
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the modern era
, make us to communicate easily and make the most of it in advantage of decreasing the cost of education by
eliminate
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eliminating
 physical classes and lectures and replace them with distance-learning.
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, a vast majority of individuals, whom are living in remote areas
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 as mountainous areas cannot be taught unless on the internet ground
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 they have not been accessed to educational infrastructures like universities or colleges. So conventional
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ways, such
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 as lecture may not be suitable for all. In conclusion, I believe,
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 other unconventional ways of teaching have lots of benefits and sometimes outweigh to traditional ways, but still have their
hindsight so
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hindsight, so
 I think a combination of lecture and distance-learning will be the best opt.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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