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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts
that
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the fact of three companies
they
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produced
waste
 in the past 15
years
.
Also
, all of the
waste
measurement
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measurements
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in
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are in
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 tonnes.
Overall
, In
company
 A, started period was very high
waste
 products rather than the ending
years
.
Company
 B was a very fluctuating chart around that time, but in all of the
comparison
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comparisons
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,
this
company
 had
list
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a list
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 amount of
waste
 products in the
last
years
.
However
, a more increased line on the chart was
company
 C.
Firstly
, in 2000,
first
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the first
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company
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company's
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waste
 was around 12
tones
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tonnes
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then
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than
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 the flowing year they had to
decreased
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decrease
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 yet
2015
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in 2015
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 is nearly 8
tones
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tonnes
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.
On the other hand
, the
second
company
 started to
waste
 almost 8
tones
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tonnes
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 and
to
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 the
next
 5
years
, they had to
rose
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rise
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up
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.
Additionally
,
then
 they decreased to the
next
 10
years
 is 3
tones
. At
last
, the
third
company
 was totally different from another
company
. It was suddenly up, slightly up and grow in the
years
of
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2000 and
accordingly
 gap between 5
years
 till 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, next".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, years, company, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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