Some people support the idea of imposing taxes of fossil fuels (oil, coal and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption, other disagree with this point Consider the debate and its arguments and came to your own conclusions.

Fossil
fuels
are
essential
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part of life, utilization of
energy
is
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has
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increased
therefore
some individuals think that
government
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the government
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should levy
for
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apply
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energy
,
such
as oil, coal
as well
as
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and
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gas
as a result
dwindle of
consumption
. I will judge now and I provide my own conclusion. Arguably, there could be reasons why
rocketing
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the rocketing
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price of
energy
lead
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leads
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to lower
consumption
and lower emissions. They point to evidence from eclectic
countries
,
for instance
, Sweden, where
to be
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the
appear
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this
case after that all population of
this
country are adjusted to
this
circumstance.
Moreover
, if the
state
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able to legislate fuel taxation for inhabitants, people try to use renewable
energy
such
as solar power or localized biofuel reactors. To the
supports
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of
this
idea, these benefits are convincing. Notwithstanding
shortage
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the shortage
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of population in some
countries
, they have to load some charge to people for
consumption
energy
because First world
countries
suffer from the lack of
energy
, by which I mean that developed
countries
have got
too
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to
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purchase
fuels
via that kind of country. As
evidence
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evidence,
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China
require
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a large proportion of
energy
. Foremost among other
challenge
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challenges
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appear to be more
issue
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issues
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of the world condition.
Initially
, opponents of fuel tax are able to cite evidence from other
countries
(subsuming France and
German
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Germany
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) where higher
charge
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charges
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apparently not
reduced
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of
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consumption
. In these
case
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cases
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, more and more people exploit
fuels
in spite of increasing
cost
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costs
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.
Furthermore
, if the state
control
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controls
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market
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the market
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of
fuels
,
they
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it
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can cease
waste
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the waste
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of
energy
.
For example
, the USA consistently manage inhabitant of
consumption
,
this
way is
efficiency
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not only
The
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USA but
also
for the world. In a nutshell, I would tend to side with the opponents of fuel taxation. It seems to be unreasonable to force vulnerable consumers to pay more for a commodity which is essential to them, without a real infrastructure for renewable
energy
being in place.
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